I think that I did a pretty good job recreating the scene,  and describing what the lady and my neighbors look like. Within the story, I used many different metaphors, good description details, feelings, and sounds. I think that I created an image for the neighbors and the lady so well, that you could imagine what they looked like in your mind as you read the story. I used dialogue, but I suppose I could have used more. I used many descriptions for the time of day, what the day looked like, what the temperature was, so that the reader would be able to imagine the story better.